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Old 06-10-04, 12:05 AM
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I've got one word for you . . . PRONOUNS!!!!!

Stop using their names EVERY time. Try, "his girlfriend" or "her boyfriend" or "her friend" instead of Sarah, Jake, and Joe respectively. It certainly would make it MUCH easier to read.
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