The darkest hour

[RSK]

In this poem, I don't think the 'when i'm asleep' part of each verse really fits to the flow, if anything, it breaks it up. It makes the poem a bit scratched up, and lost, feeling something is missing, an 'emptyness' - which is kind of the point of the words, so i guess it does fit.

The darkest hour
In time of need
talking to
myself asleep

I wish this moment
passes soon
it only ends
when I'm asleep

this pain inside
i cannot keep
it goes away
when i'm asleep

i'll dream those nights
away in bed
away from here
when i'm asleep

I do not
want to feel this week
but it only ends
when i'm asleep

[IndiReloaded]

RK, please keep these poems in some kind of journal (i.e. don't discard them). They are like that book I mentioned before about musings of a young doctor. You'll want these for later, trust me.

[RSK]

thanks indi, i've written many random poems on paper, but i always seem to loose them, and throw them away, the only one's i've kept are on this site, i think i will get a free hosting website, and copy/paste and date them on it.

thanks for the idea, i will. im the future, i will look at the poems in a different light.

i kind of wish whaywardj was still around too, he did mention or start me up with some kind of website to post, but i never did follow through.

thanks again!

[IndiReloaded]

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Originally Posted by RSK

i kind of wish whaywardj was still around too, he did mention or start me up with some kind of website to post, but i never did follow through.

Check your PM, RK.

[simrn]

Quote:

Originally Posted by RSK

thanks indi, i've written many random poems on paper, but i always seem to loose them, and throw them away, the only one's i've kept are on this site, i think i will get a free hosting website, and copy/paste and date them on it.

thanks for the idea, i will. im the future, i will look at the poems in a different light.

i kind of wish whaywardj was still around too, he did mention or start me up with some kind of website to post, but i never did follow through.

thanks again!

It's good to post poems in a forum but it's really a nice idea to create a personal website or a blog and publish your poems there. Since when this is written in a personal diary, only you can read them; but when you publish on internet, it mihgt reach the targeted audience.