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Old 17-06-08, 02:43 PM
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listen to the sorrows she weeps.
stand in her presents
and walk a mile in her shoes.
hear the words she whispers
and reminisce where she's at

do you hear the sorrows?
the creeps from her past...
and realize what she had went through..
and what she hasnt't forgot or let go.

she's taught to forgive, but never forget
taught to love and not to hate.
and learned to move on, but never let go.
move from the past and live within' the presents
and prepare for he future.

she does what she does,
and learns from her mistakes the hard way.
never regrets...just learns
and make it better in the end.

take a step inside.
hold on and stay in.
take a minute and look towards her, not out of her.

you judge her by appearences and what you hear.
the rumors.lies.and haters trash talking.
why not look inside of her?

don't judge a book by it's cover.

look at the real her
forget what you heard. good and bad.
she's nothing but real...
but little of her is fake.

it stands upon her face.
and looks real but ain't.

look at the smile.
laughing away and seems happy
when really she isn't

she's torn down and lies to herself.
she's the game piece to her own game.

never can seem to fall in love.
guys stay the same and **** with her emotions.

she's dumb enough to fall for their cheesy lines and stupid lies.
sweet things they do and how they make her smile.
always to good to be true.

she hurts the ones who love her the most,
but doesn't intend to.
too picky of a choice
and always admits she can never make up her mind.

soo. why do guys keep coming her way?
always asking why, but never gets an answer.

she lives a good life and never tends to fall.
there's been a few bumps, but she's survived.

keep looking.
lisetn carefully.
reminisce what you had or work upon it

because sooner or later she'll be gone..
where she belongs..


i wrote this all by myself. something that i feel. there's a message in here, but there's more then one.kind of confusung?? yea i know. idk a title. so please be honest and tell me what you think.
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I don't know. I may have to read it again but it seems that her thoughts and emotions keep fluctuating from postive to negative. Is she really postive about her outlook or negative? I cannot tell but maybe that is the purpose? She definitely sounds lost if that is what you are going for. It seems she is trying to be sure of herself but her soul needs growing. In the beginning it sounded like a bitter sweet song but later it lost that vibe. "Where does she belong?"..maybe that can be the title. May I ask: where does she belong? I am no professional or even close so I will say it was nice. Make sure to correct the very minor typos and it maybe fine.
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she hurts the ones who love her the most,
but doesn't intend to.
too picky of a choice
and always admits she can never make up her mind.
I think I dated her once
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