Originally Posted by Sami09
Does anyone watch that show(1). Yesterday(2) it was about two twin(3) that are heroin (4)addicted. they have 3 episode(5) about them and they for sure have gone a long way. They are both heading to different rehab centers. I really hope they stay clean. (6)one of the girls is 6 months pregnant(7) is it possible for that baby to survive i(8) wonder she did heroin(9) and did (10)drink and does (11)smoke while the baby in her stomach. Did anyone see these episode(12).
(1) Incorrect punctuation.
(2) Lack of punctuation.
(3) *twins
(4) "Heroin addicted?" You must be a moron.
(5) *episodes
(6) Capitalize.
(7) Lack of punctuation.
(8) Capitalize.
(9) Lack of punctuation.
(10) In this context, "and did drink" is wrong.
(11) Run-on. Consider revising.
(12) *episodes; incorrect punctuation.
Originally Posted by Sami09
Not really(1) (2)i watch(3) a few shows. Not (4)dr (5)phil all the time just when it(6) good. (7)talk shows have good topic(8) some days and really bad ones other days(9).
(1) Lack of punctuation.
(2) Capitalize.
(3) *watched
(4) Capitalize.
(5) Capitalize.
(6) *it's
(7) Capitalize.
(8) *topics
(9) The way you worded it makes you sound ****ing stupid.
Originally Posted by Sami09
At least the girls at(1) getting help. You didn(2)t see the show but (3)wow where they bad when they first (4)began.
(1) *are
(2) *didn't
(3) Unnecessary and illegal.
(4) Replace with "started."